Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do you support it or not?

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Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do you support it or not?

Recently, the phenomenon of becoming famous peoples as a role model for youngsters and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the matter of choosing the right public figure is highly rewarding, some opponents argued about its negative aspects. I am profoundly inclined to believe that following the right person as a role model not only could be beneficial, but also could bring many merits for the young generation, and this essay will examine both sides by providing some academic evidence before concluding.

From a social standpoint, following successful persons could provide a society with some noticeable effects which are rooted in hardworking and its corresponding results. Furthermore, many of the athletes are participating in some charity programs which could be a good motivation for their young followers. From my own experience when I was a college student and I participated in academic research in our University, most of the young students are willing to follow the famous actors’ footstep in some useful community services.

On the other hand, some opponents claim their arguments about the demerits of following famous actors. They are using valid logic to support that some of these public figures may involve in drug use or some racial discrimination, and as a consequence, these disorder behaviors affected young followers. According to an academic research conducted by Tehran University, many of famous singers, especially the younger one, did not obey the ethical values of the society which could have some detrimental impacts on their advocators.

To recapitulate, I pen down saying that following the celebrities is like a two-edged sword, and it is on young generation to choose wisely who to follow. Moreover, governments could set some preventing rules to decrease some social damage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, may, moreover, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 20.9802955665 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1207.87684729 132% => OK
No of words: 293.0 242.827586207 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42662116041 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98600290545 2.71678728327 110% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 139.433497537 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600682593857 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 379.143842365 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.931034482759 430% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.5024630542 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.1551603739 50.4703680194 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.545454545 104.977214359 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 20.9669160288 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 7.25397266985 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0575244125156 0.242375264174 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0248395942273 0.0925447433944 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352108643068 0.071462118173 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0350990910357 0.151781067708 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363887955543 0.0609392437508 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 12.6369458128 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 53.1260098522 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.9458128079 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 11.5310837438 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.32886699507 123% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 55.0591133005 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.3980295567 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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