Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters.Do you support it or not?(Agree/Disagree)
People have different opinions regarding the impact of celebrities in the fields of movies and sports on growing up children. In this glamorous days, where most of the youngsters are crazy on sports, films and social media, there is always a possibility of following them due to their looks, personality which seem colorful to the outside world. But, it always depends on individual choice of following those stars. I agree to this view to a large extent.In this essay, some of the positive and negative traits of taking them as role models are discussed, before coming to a logical conclusion.
Firstly, I appreciate these achievers because they have reached this position and stardom due to a lot of effort from their side. Particularly, most of the sports persona have reached to this level, due to their continuous effort and hard work which proves worthy to be taken as role model for oneself. Secondly, most of the team spirit and building qualities from sports persons or upgrading to the period and situation from film stars must be learned from these achievers.
Further, some of the well known qualities which they achieve even after becoming famous must be considered and can be taken as positive traits to follow. In addition to that, their continuous effort in maintaining their position irrespective of all the odds and competitions must also be learned from them.
Any person always has some negative traits since they are also a normal human being even though, they have reached to star level. Some of the behavior traits which are depicted in movies must not be taken as examples, since that may affect individual's personality. Only the bright or good sides are shown in media but not always the dark side. Hence, it is always not advisable to follow them blindly just by seeing their outward glamorous persona.
To sum up, there are always some positive and negative traits for any individual. But in my view, there are many benefits in following the positive sides but should avoid getting attracted by their negative traits. This is particularly applicable to youngsters who follow these stars since they are always humans before reaching stardom levels.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.5418719212 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 8.36945812808 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 20.9802955665 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 31.9359605911 178% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1207.87684729 151% => OK
No of words: 363.0 242.827586207 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02479338843 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 3.92707691288 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53399205611 2.71678728327 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 139.433497537 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517906336088 0.580463131201 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 379.143842365 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6551724138 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6340503151 50.4703680194 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 104.977214359 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 20.9669160288 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 7.25397266985 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.33497536946 94% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110804255701 0.242375264174 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.037073336345 0.0925447433944 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387919184759 0.071462118173 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0640197608729 0.151781067708 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414679710082 0.0609392437508 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 12.6369458128 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.1260098522 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 11.5310837438 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32886699507 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 55.0591133005 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.94827586207 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 67.5 Out of 90
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