Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time Which of these situations do you think is better

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

Today's youth is developing at a very faster pace. It is required for everyone to be a self dependent, obedient, knowledgeable person otherwise it is difficult to stand in such a competitive market. But, to have such type of qualities, foremost important thing for an adult is to be respectful, obedient and firm which can only develop if young adults live with their families for a longer time. However, if adults want to live independent then rather than becoming talented they become harsh, notorious because in the developing stages it is required for an adult to live under observation of their parents otherwise they will definitely get involved in some bad deeds.

To begin with, if an adult is young or we can say that in a developing stage then it is required for him to live under observation. This is required because the behavior of an adult in the developing stage changes according to surroundings, it is difficult for him to change that behavior in older stages. If in developing stage adults live with their family then they will definitely teach him about obedience. Parents also teach the adult that how to give respect to others. But at the same time if in developing stage adult isolated from their parents then it is difficult for him to understand obedience and it could be a possibility that adult get involved in some bad deeds like drug addiction etc. which makes impossible for an adult to be a self dependent person.

In addition to it, if young adults live with their families then it will also lead to produce a trait of cooperation or unity in them. To be successful in life cooperative behavior is necessary. It helps the adult to understand other person feelings and also helps him to be a good decision maker because a cooperative person first understands other person's emotions, feeling and then take a right decision. This will produce only if children live with his parents. It is appropriate to consider that if an adult live with families for longer times then a sense of unity in him developed automatically because s/he is living in an environment in which various people are living around him and he has to take care of emotions and feeling of everyone. However, if he lives independently then it is difficult to develop a sense of cooperation because from a childhood days he thinks to remain isolated from others.

Furthermore, if a young adult is living with parents then it is appropriate that a sense of considering responsibilities will automatically engenders in him. Children will be able to comprehend his responsibilities towards parents and other family members. He will be able to know the difficulties his parents are facing for his nurture properly and then in the future adult will obey his responsibilities and give complete support to his parents. This sense of responsibility will never engenders in a children who is living isolated from parents because s/he is not familiar with the difficulties his parents facing while nourishing him.

In conclusion, it is required for young adults to familiarize themselves with the responsibilities they has towards their families which will only occur if they live with parents for longer times. This helps children’s to be an obedient, respectful and independent person. It is undeniable that society accepts only obedient and self independent person which indirectly helps in the development of the nation.

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