TOEFL essay: Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. Which..

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Submitted by Ana on Thu, 10/11/2012 - 17:43

Free time is the time which everyone likes to spend by doing their favorite activities such as, playing, watching movies, and hanging out with friends. Planning plays important role to manage our activities without wasting time. Some people like to plan for their activities while others do not. I like to plan my every activity. It is not only important in our professional life, but also in our personal life, because it saves our time, energy and money.

First, planning helps to me utilize my full time without wasting it. I like to plan my each and every activity. It helps me to manage all my activities without wasting time. It gives satisfaction, that I have done it according to plan. For example, I like to spend my free time in outdoor activities such as, biking, boating, kayaking, and many others, which are close to nature. These are our weekend activities, which I plan and make full use of our weekend. As I plan everything before, it not only saves our time but also money.

Second, planning helps me to make my activities more enjoyable and saves our energy. For example, if I want to hang out with my friends on coming weekend, I can plan by finding a correct place and time, and then ask my friends. If everyone is ready then we can enjoy it together. On the other hand, if we go without planning, then we might waste our time by running here and there. This could spoil our mood. So, planning is important to make your activities more enjoyable and it also saves energy.

Finally, it is not possible to plan our activities every time, but we could learn to manage our time by handling such situations. Therefore, I would prefer to plan my activities to save my time, energy and money.

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No. of Different Words: 135 200
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 80
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.3 21.0 (need more compound or complex sentences)

Need to improve your vocabulary words.

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Score: 4.0 out of 6 (or 22 in 30)
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1350 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.412 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.342 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.482 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

Thanks again!!

After submitting few essays here, I realized that my vocabulary is really weak. Would you like to suggest something to improve that? I read words, keep in mind, but when time come to write it down, I don't remember those words, and I just write regular words which makes my essay, can say school level or intermediate level.

I am sorry, but one more question. I also need to improve my sentences. As per you suggestion, I must use more compound and complex sentences. Please suggest me something which will help me to improve my sentence structure also.

Thank you so much!!

Regards,
Ana.

You can search online on how to write compound and complex sentences. there are a lot of instructions.

But we suggest you read those GMAT/GRE top essays on testbig site. Though they are different exams, they are more professional. You will get a lot of ideas on how to write compound and complex sentences by reading them.