Enjoyment is something which adds a spark and motivation to people's life and everybody irrespective of the age wants to enjoy the life more or less,this way or the other way but I believe that in-spite of having a desire to enjoy older people are somewhat unable to enjoy as much as young people do. I have a few reasons for having this view which I will explore below.
First,it is a widely accepted truth that people generally tend to remain sick and unhealthy as they get older which is the main reason which hold them back from enjoying a lot. For example young people can have dinner in a restaurant after watching a movie in theater,come late at home and are able to get up early to go to office whereas older people get tired very soon and find themselves unable to stay awake until late night so they miss the chance to enjoy parties or late night movies etc.
Second as some of the resources for enjoyment have been invented lately, as internet or social networking sites,online video sites etc which most of the older people are unaware of. They do not know how to use them so they miss even this chance to enjoy at home. They just have an option to sit and watch the television or talk to someone.
Furthermore,the people from previous generations are not really mad about enjoying as people from this generation. For or example I eagerly wait for the weekend so that I can go shopping with my husband or to go out for dinner or invite somebody for a house party etc. Whereas older people are not as crazy as we are,for them raising a family comfortably,having time together and talking about small silly things are also parts of enjoyment.
So from the above mentioned points,I can draw a conclusion that enjoyment being a very interesting part in everyone's life is important for young people as well as older but young people enjoy life more and to the fullest as they are physically more fit,have more options and most importantly they earn and live mostly to enjoy.
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So from the above mentioned points,I can draw a conclusion that enjoyment being a very interesting part in everyone's life is important for young people as well as older but young people enjoy life more and to the fullest as they are physically more fit,have more options and most importantly they earn and live mostly to enjoy.
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