TPO30Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to

Personally, I agree that it is more enjoyable to have a job where I work only three days a week for extended hours than to have a job where I work five days a week for shorter hours for several explanations.

First, working for fewer days with long hours give me the opportunity to spend more time with my family, for instance, I have three kids attend the school for a full day, so I can set my schedule that fit my requirements. Moreover, I could take my day off at the weekend, so I have a big chance to have fun together. In fact, I could make a plan to get more entertainment inside and outside.

Second, however, I fell so tiredly if my schedule is long, but I could seize my free days to do other things such as follow up doctor appointments. For example, during my day off, I could set up appointments for my kids because I could not have a chance to make an appointment during my short time.

Third, having more time to see my friend. For instance, when I have days free, I could arrange to meet my close friend and enjoy having lunch together. And may take our kids with us so we could do to the museum because of most of the entertainment place close at 4 p.m. Besides, if I work for a short time I can not take my kids with my friend’s kids together after finishing my work because of most of the places are closed.

As a conclusion, working for long hours with some of the full days off better than short hours with less day off.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, third, for example, for instance, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1174.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 280.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.19285714286 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51501612767 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478571428571 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 366.3 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.4550934057 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.4 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1 5.45110844103 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351185364332 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171383911491 0.076458572812 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167111955366 0.0737576698707 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266537949507 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.188490747371 0.0645574589148 292% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.32 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 86.8835125448 36% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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working for fewer days with long hours give me the opportunity
working for fewer days with long hours gives me the opportunity

I have three kids attend the school for a full day
I have three kids who attend the school for a full day

because of most of the entertainment place close at 4 p.m.
because most of the entertainment places close at 4 p.m.

because of most of the places are closed.
because most of the places are closed.

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flaws:
No. of Words: 280 350

need to have more content.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 280 350
No. of Characters: 1131 1500
No. of Different Words: 128 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.091 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.039 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.336 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 56 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 36 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 12 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.82 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.506 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.749 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.218 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5