TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The reader claims three possible arguments related to the utilizing the Buzzer for the company advertisement and provides the reasons for support. On the other hand, the professor states that all of the reasons are misleading and give the wrong impression.

First, the reader discusses the customer should inform them about the person who is working as a Buzzer. Conversely, the speaker casts doubt on this point by explaining that the people who work for the company as a Buzzer should already have the product of that company hired them, and it is crucial. Furthermore, when the Buzzer explains something related to the company products, he already has this product.

Second, the reader states the pretending action of the Buzzer, while the professor debates that by telling that is not true and the opposite is the truth, and it is groundless. And the Bazzer reveals all the information dealing with the product about the price and other customers questions.

Lastly, the reader disputes the negative social relationship that impacts on the society. The speaker counters this idea by saying the customers gain valuable feedback from the expertise so this would build excellent interpersonal skills with the customer and with society as a whole.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e other hand, the professor states that all of the reasons are misleading and give the wro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, furthermore, lastly, second, so, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1048.0 1373.03311258 76% => OK
No of words: 203.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16256157635 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61617634252 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 145.348785872 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551724137931 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 309.6 419.366225166 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0213616711 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.444444444 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177445333285 0.272083759551 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722399785069 0.0996497079465 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392575028591 0.0662205650399 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113297657067 0.162205337803 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038025394465 0.0443174109184 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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flaws:

No. of Words: 203 250 //more content wanted.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 12
No. of Words: 203 250
No. of Characters: 1023 1200
No. of Different Words: 110 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.775 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.039 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.528 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.35 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.69 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4