Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education has a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. It enhances our success endlessly because it encompasses our core. Therefore, I adamantly disagree that parent today are more involved in their children's education than they were parents in the past, because of the invention of sophisticated technology is affected both the new generations' knowledge and personality.
First of all, flourishing technology has a profound implication on young people education. The matter of fact, by immersing in technology, the new era is becoming a self-reliant individual. For instance, students nowadays are becoming passionate about squandering their time in technology. They are starting to depend on themselves in executing their studying-related duties. So, when the professor gave them an assignment, they are utilizing the technology such as searching in the google to gain valuable information regarding the topic that they need. Besides, technical innovation pushes the children to implement their homework without asking for assistance from their mentors or parents. However, in the past, the children were more dependable on their parents; I remembered when I was in school, I was heavily depending on my father to help me to do my duties. Hence, technology has a positive impact on students' knowledge acquisition, and the parents are less involving in helping their kids.
Second, the life today is vastly different from it was before, the parents are becoming busier than the past. Indeed, they are playing less role in their children lives, because of the invention of technology has become priceless in term of benefit on young people lives. For example, I have a child; he is seven years old, I realized that he became creative when he is using his iPad. By utilizing this device, he could improve his math skills. I noticed that he was watching some videos on youtube which help him to boost his task, he learned how to add, subtract and divide by himself. So, by seeing some educational programs using the technology, he became more successful in the math field. In contrast, before the invention of technology, the kids were spending vast time with their relative to teach them how to improve their math skills. Therefore, the new era can evolve their skills without depending on their parents.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, the parents today are less involved in teaching their children. Not only the technical innovation helps the kids to enhance their knowledge acquisition, but also it boosts their skills. Hopefully, all parents appreciate these spectacular innovations.
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Essay evaluation report
because of the invention of sophisticated technology is affected both the new generations' knowledge and personality.
because the invention of sophisticated technology is affected both the new generations' knowledge and personality.
because of the invention of technology has become priceless in term of benefit on young people lives.
because the invention of technology has become priceless in term of benefit on young people lives.
Not only the technical innovation helps the kids to enhance their knowledge acquisition, but also it boosts their skills.
Description: 'Not only...but also' is not used properly. can you re-write this sentence?
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flaws:
No. of Words: 417 No. of Different Words: 211 //it means it has a lot of duplicated words.
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 2143 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.139 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.833 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.955 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.859 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.451 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...ted technology is affected both the new generations knowledge and personality. First of ...
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Line 3, column 806, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...s; I remembered when I was in school, I was heavily depending on my father to help me to do my duties...
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Line 3, column 875, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ather to help me to do my duties. Hence, technology has a positive impact on stud...
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Line 3, column 913, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...e, technology has a positive impact on students knowledge acquisition, and the parents ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32211538462 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00329192538 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521634615385 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8674816442 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.636363636 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238579634934 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068924792781 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825502415061 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17275683042 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054830587404 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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