Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology has a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. It enhances our success in immeasurable ways because it encompasses our core. Therefore, I adamantly agree that movies and television have a negative effect on young people than positive effect because these devices could influence both youth’s health and social skills.
First of all, immersing children in television program effect crucially on their welfare. Indeed, there are several programs on the television which push the kids to eat unhealthy food. For instance, I have a son; he is three years old, whenever he watches an announcement on the television such as an advertisement for candy, ice cream, and junk food, he asks me for giving him the same things. I realized that he is gaining in weight because of too much eating from this type of food. Besides, spending ample of time watching these programs push them from the necessary thing such as doing physical activities and working out. Hence, television and movies might prone the children to weight-related disorder and deteriorate their health.
Second, engaging children in a television program has a profound implication on their social skills. In fact, if they spend vast of time watching these programs, this thing will negatively effect on their interpersonal skills. For example, Nowadays, the availability of sophisticated technology makes the youth more interest in watching television and movies. As a result, their communication skills affected negatively because of they instead of co-operating and collaborate with other peers of the same ages; they squander their time by watching these movies. So, the children became socially inactive which, in turn, it will hurt their career success in the future because they became socially awkward. As you can see, movies and television hurt the youth’s prosperity.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, technical innovation such as television and movies have a dramatic effect on young people. Not only it harms their health, but also it hurts their interpersonal skills. Hopefully, all people will be aware of the importance of the adverse effect of these innovations.
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spending ample of time watching these programs push them
spending ample of time watching these programs pushes them
television and movies might prone the children to weight-related disorder and deteriorate their health.
description: prone is not used properly.
Definitions of prone
adjective
likely to or liable to suffer from, do, or experience something, typically something regrettable or unwelcome.
years of logging had left the mountains prone to mudslides
synonyms: susceptible, vulnerable, subject, open, liable, given, predisposed, likely, disposed, inclined, apt, at risk of
lying flat, especially face downward.
I was lying prone on a foam mattress
synonyms: (lying) face down, face downward, on one's stomach/front, lying flat/down, horizontal, prostrate
this thing will negatively effect on their interpersonal skills
this thing will negatively affect on their interpersonal skills //be careful with 'affect' and 'effect'
the youth more interest in watching television and movies.
the youths more interested in watching television and movies.
their communication skills affected negatively because of they instead of co-operating and collaborate with other peers of the same ages
their communication skills are affected negatively because they instead of co-operating and collaborate with other peers of the same ages
Not only it harms their health, but also it hurts their interpersonal skills.
Description: 'Not only...but also' is not used properly.
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flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
2. most sentences are simple sentences. need more complex or compound sentences. read more English articles. like this:
https://www.testbig.com/reading_and_listening
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1782 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.195 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.823 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.442 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[7]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...se programs, this thing will negatively effect on their interpersonal skills. For exam...
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Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...ommunication skills affected negatively because of they instead of co-operating and collaborate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39358600583 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91688303067 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556851311953 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.088890289 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.777777778 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0555555556 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202450251 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649348019283 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765837780346 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142358354744 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621669834179 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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