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Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave

With movies and television soaring in popularity in recent years, they have gradually become part of the life of the new generation. Children’s behavior and values seem to be significantly influenced. On that account, increasing attention is being paid concerning whether the effects are positive or negative on the whole. Admittedly, some TV programs can be educational and beneficial to children. It is more often the case, however, that movies and television may well lead to malign effects.

It is self-evident that most young people initially choose movies and TV shows as a means of entertainment, but some of them may inadvertently fall victim to such addiction. Modern recreational programs are often designed in a way to attract and retain viewers to the greatest extent. For example, episodes in most TV series nowadays tend to end with the opening of another story line, which aims to keep the audience in suspense. A large number of viewers are so desperate for the plot afterwards that they cannot wait to continue watching the next one, which eventually results in days of non-stop watching. Young people, in this regard, are even more prone to addiction. Without clear plans for the future, they are less likely to be self-disciplined enough to get rid of such movies and TV programs, which may well pose a terrible problem for their personal growth.

In addition, unfiltered movies and television shows are likely to have adverse effects on children’s mental health. Without established values and abilities to tell right from wrong, young people will be hugely susceptible to negative things in TV programs involving violence or even crimes, if they manage to have access to assortments of movies and television shows. Take a friend of mine as an example. When I met him for the first time at junior high school, he was as hardworking as any other student in class. During years at school, however, he got access to inappropriate content on the Internet, which marked the beginning of his depravation. Multitudinous TV series involving violence and other negative elements made him an irritable and cynical person in the end. It can be clearly seen that such movies can easily lead to terrible consequences, even ruining a teenager’s life.

To sum up, although movies and TV series can provide much-needed relaxation and be educational in some occasions, the cons of them always outweigh the pros due to potential problems of addiction and harmful elements. These negative impacts call for close supervision from parents or mentors on children’s access to such materials.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
... aims to keep the audience in suspense. A large number of viewers are so desperate for the plot a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, well, for example, in addition, on the whole, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14622641509 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92520914169 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558962264151 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8479507792 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.1 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222491214807 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616383564477 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708075746173 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12821939558 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673379417815 0.0645574589148 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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