TPO-21 - Integrated Writing Task Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, g

Reading talks about genetic modification. Which is a process used to change an organism's genetics and hence their characteristics. To improve trees production, farmer begin to modify tress genetically. However, lecturer made claims on all mentioned advantages of genetic modification in the reading passage.
First of all, author of the reading suggests that, genetic modify trees are much hardier as compare to other natural trees. For example, in Hawaii city papayas is a species of tree which are most resistant to virus while, farmers get modify them genetically. On contrary, the lecturer refuse that, modify trees are much better hardier .She argues that, it is right that genetic modification increase the ability of trees to be more resistance against virus but, if climate have begin to change the trees would not survive their self. And virus would stay remain to distract the trees.
Second, writer mentions that, genetic modification bring huge economic benefits for those who grow them because, once trees go thorough genetic modification process they will grow fast and, will produce enormous foods and fruit. On the other hand, professor claims that, farmer will be benefited economic when trees became modified. Furthermore, she said that, seeds of trees are less capable to grow fast as fast due to climatic changes so, each modify trees required three farmers until they could handle them. So, they are supposed to pay extra money to farmers for seeding.
Finally, reading states that, genetic modify trees will reduce the exploitation for other wild trees in nature. Due to requirements of people about consumption of firewood are high, people can prefer to make genetic modification process wider in order to fulfill their requirements. However, speaker said that, when modification process begin to start, trees would grow aggressively and would be hard to prevent wild trees due to actively damage them. He puts forth that, trees by modification process grows after a long time. And the wild trees consumption will increase by people.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'organisms'' or 'organism's'?
Suggestion: organisms'; organism's
...n. Which is a process used to change an organisms genetics and hence their characteristic...
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Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed advantages of genetic modification in the reading passage. First of all, aut...
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Line 2, column 90, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
..., genetic modify trees are much hardier as compare to other natural trees. For exa...
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Line 2, column 335, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...at, modify trees are much better hardier .She argues that, it is right that genet...
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Line 2, column 337, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: She
..., modify trees are much better hardier .She argues that, it is right that genetic ...
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Line 2, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re much better hardier .She argues that, it is right that genetic modification in...
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Line 2, column 480, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'begun'.
Suggestion: begun
...ance against virus but, if climate have begin to change the trees would not survive t...
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Line 4, column 541, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'trees'' or 'tree's'?
Suggestion: trees'; tree's
...s grows after a long time. And the wild trees consumption will increase by people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, while, for example, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1373.03311258 126% => OK
No of words: 328.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28048780488 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60244445333 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536585365854 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6566807993 49.2860985944 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.882352941 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.48034960818 0.272083759551 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172176347295 0.0996497079465 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809909547941 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325560006482 0.162205337803 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045654824711 0.0443174109184 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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