TPO 5 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do

I think human beings have increased the quality of their life continuously throughout history. They first resided in cave to protect them from fierce animals, harsh warmth, and frigidity and this was the first step into welfare. Therefore, I believe our life is much comfortable in comparison to older generation like the grandparents. Thanks to the latest medical breakthroughs human life expectancy dramatically raised. We are surrounded by many facilities which make life comfortable. Besides, we have more democratic, impartial and equal society.

First, it goes, without doubt, recent medical advances considerably decrease fertility rate and overall life expectancy increase. In groom days of the past people may have perished for a mere cold, but today we have vaccines for a variety of illnesses which immune us against diseases. Furthermore, hospitals and medical staff are abundant which makes them accessible for all members of community.

Second, technology have brought us plenty of inventions which comfort our life. Inventions and discoveries such as electricity, the internet, computers, petroleum, etc. For instance, using internet and computer, online shopping is available. While you are seating at your desk, order whatever you want like delicious pizza or even a suit! Plus, many of these devices are affordable, and the majority of people can utilize them.

Ultimately, we enjoy many social developments which guarantee peace, security, and freedom in our society. According to the UN annual report, with the passage of time, nations of the world are becoming more democratic, and the gender gap will vanish soon across the globe. In the past, women were taken account of housework, and they did not participate in social activities. Fortunately, this kind of discriminations have abolished in many areas, and even they can be nominated for power positions.

For all the reasons that I have stated, I assume that our generation has a more convenient life in comparison to the grandparent's generation. We not only are inundated with fruits of technology which increase our longevity and relieve human pains but also we have unbiased societies. No matter what your ethnicity, gender or religion are, you are capable of prospering.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 118, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'grandparents'' or 'grandparent's'?
Suggestion: grandparents'; grandparent's
...re convenient life in comparison to the grandparents generation. We not only are inundated w...
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Line 9, column 371, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion are, you are capable of prospering.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48011363636 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9354922693 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630681818182 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4966789399 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.45 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0579073193288 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0162881072662 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0183467782212 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0336931064905 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016276364102 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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