some people think that the advantages of advertising sports products through famous sports players outweigh the disadvantages to what e do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, in this competitive business world, importance of advertisement as an essential requirement is undeniable for majority of people and commercial companies. There are lots of products presentation methods to fulfill in all over the world. By distribution of sport activities and tournaments, sport related topics are significant methods of advertisements.
Some advertisement experts believe that utilizing well-known sport players in sports products advertisement have several prominent advantages. In their opinion, first of all, these players can achieve more money in this way. Recent published reports in England has been illustrated that famous players can achieve more than 30% of their annual income from advertisement. Secondly, famous clubs can increase their income by employ and use of international big players. In addition, utilizing famous players in advertisement is very beneficial for sport products companies too. Comprehensive financial investigations reveal that the trend of sale after this method in sport products companies have been ascend totally.
On the other hand, some sport critics insist that utilizing famous sport players on advertisement, is considerably detrimental for clubs and players. They emphasize that according their researches in some professional clubs, the efficiency of famous players diminished sharply after participating in advertisement. They think that the most important reason of this phenomenon is decreasing on concentration in their fundamental duties. Furthermore, because of the fame, these players are often disordered and create some issues for their clubs, coaches and even advocators. Consequently, because of their contract with famous companies and some financial benefits, club managers are reluctant to resist against these disciplinary problems and it causes to increasing chaos in sport teams.
In conclusion, advertisement world because of financial value is very interesting for sport players and clubs. I think that advantages of this phenomenon is more than disadvantages undoubtedly. I believe that sport clubs should devise some appropriate plans to balance between advertisement activities of players and their intrinsic duties. It can help clubs to improve their sport results and income simultaneously.

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Average: 7.7 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 702, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'ascended'.
Suggestion: ascended
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97568389058 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26314125259 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528875379939 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5394494771 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.222222222 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319552416632 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112271897738 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767430935181 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207936939365 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416603740155 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.4 12.4159519038 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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