The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market (IELTS BOOK 3 TEST 1)

The given bar chart illustrates the information about the number Japanese community who has travelled to overseas countries from 1985 to 1995. Whereas, The line graph represents the data about Australians shares in Japan's tourist industry.

Overall, It can be seen that there was continuous progress of Japanese tourist travelling to other countries until 1991. On the other hand, The percentages of Australian shares of Japan's tourist market were fluctuated over a given period of time.

According to bar chart, In 1985 about five millions people of Japan's travelled to overseas countries, Further this trend had been growing to 11 millions in 1990, Before fallen by 1 million in next year. Thereafter, The numbers of Japanese travellers to abroad gradually rose reaching to approximately 15 millions in last period.

Regards to the line graph, Initially about two percent of Australia’s shares came in Japan's tourist market. Then it's gradually increased to 5 percent in 1988. After which went down by 1 percent in next year, Thereafter, The percentages of shares slightly increased to about six percent in 1993, Then which remained unchanged until the end.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o overseas countries from 1985 to 1995. Whereas, The line graph represents the data abo...
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Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ist market were fluctuated over a given period of time. According to bar chart, In 1985 abo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 992.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36216216216 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84266770457 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605405405405 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9285105865 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.222222222 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285814295872 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117609321661 0.103423049105 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739242796067 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169471385424 0.15604864568 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560147130862 0.0819641961636 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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