"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
The author of this proposal to restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level offer an interesting argument but to move forward on the proposal requires more information. While the correlation stated are logical and probable, there may be hidden factors that prevent the television station to increase their advertising revenues.
First, the correlation between the time devoted to the parts of weather and national news, and the number of complaints is not logical. The business manager should make an evaluation of the quality of their program. it is possible that the majority of those who complain is angry because of the quality of the program. For example, there is a very important event in the region and the television channel has covered it but their coverage did not satisfy their viewer's expectations.
Secondly, if we were to learn that the television station just devoted one more minute to the national news, it would significantly weaken the conclusion. When we are talking about increase and decrease in time and value, etc we should specifically mention the number, failing that would have very adverse effects on our conclusion.
Third, the business manager should consider the programs of their competitors. If their competitors allocate a sheer scale of the budget to produce popular programs like the series, shows, etc and it has been broadcasted during the news, none of their viewers are willing to watch their news program. Consequently, the local businesses don't like to advertise in their program and substitute it by their competitors. Furthermore, the business manager should have considered the overall economy of the region because a great depression in the economy causes the cut of expenses in the advertising by business owners.
In conclusion, I believe that the proposal for restoring the time devoted to weather and local news is not logical and there are various flaws that undermine the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1612 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.053 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.679 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.655 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...uation of the quality of their program. it is possible that the majority of those ...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing that would have very adverse effects on our conclusion. Third, the busines...
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Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ram. Consequently, the local businesses dont like to advertise in their program and ...
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Line 9, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ious flaws that undermine the argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, third, while, for example, in conclusion, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2106918239 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76856210298 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496855345912 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6798465437 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.461538462 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 5.70786347227 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27881831024 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993673488043 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855657860035 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167531199784 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042263795204 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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