Claitown University needs both affordable housing for its students and a way to fund the building of such housing. The best solution to this problem is to commission a famous architect known for experimental and futuristic buildings. It is common knowledge that tourists are willing to pay money to tour some of the architect's buildings, so it can be expected that tourists will want to visit this new building. The income from the fees charged to tourists will soon cover the building costs. Furthermore, such a building will attract new students as well as donations from alumni. And even though such a building will be much larger than our current need for student housing, part of the building can be used as office space.
In this argument the speaker asserts that the Claitwon University should hire an illustrious architect known for experimental and futuristic architectures to construct a brand new building to cater the students’ needs. To substantiate the culmination,the speaker chiefly lists the benefits of inviting a prominent architect and the new housing will no doubt increase the financial revenue, which lacks evidence. However, the close scrutiny of the evidence unveils that the argument actually suffers from several critical blemishes, as discussed below.
To begin with, whether the tourists will be...
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Sentence: In addition, the professors working in the dorm would have to move out, supposing the enrolment in Claitown University sharply increases next year, which may make faculty uncomfortable.
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