Although the argument by the author, to shift focus to current problems, might seem convincing at first but if it is analyzed deeply then only one would be able to have an actual insight of the implications of the decision. In any form of society, it is obvious to have some problems. These problems though, should be prioritized based on the need of people. Let us first analyze the argument before finally arriving to a conclusion.
For first, let us examine if a government pays more attention the current problems. Consider for example, that a country is suffering from a dip in its economy and people are losing their jobs. So, for any government it will be on their priority list to boost up the economy and introduce certain programs to retain the job of its people. But how if we more deeply scrutinize to find the cause of collapsing economy? After several studies economists and analysts suggested that the main cause behind looming economy are the policies of earlier government, which only focused on the then problems and did not framed any policies for upcoming challenges to the job industry. The earlier government failed to analyze that by next five years the export will reduced due to extra tax levied by importing countries. Although the government did focus on the then issues but would anyone consider that decision to be correct?
Coming to other facet of the coin, if a government focuses on the future problems and is unable to invest in the solutions for current problems is also going to have the same fate as explained earlier. For example, a government is investing and planning to deals with the problems of depleting water sources, raising pollution and rate of consumption of fossil fuels. The same government on the other hand is facing a epidemic disease that has caused millions of people to lose their lives. Although important, but should they be focusing on the future problems at all? And that too when its own people are facing such grievous problem.
In fact in my opinion it is always vital for a government to find a balance between focusing on current problems as well as future problems. Every government has limited source of funding which it should invest prudently in cultivating the solutions to future problems as well as current problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'frame'
Suggestion: frame
...ocused on the then problems and did not framed any policies for upcoming challenges to...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 755, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
...that by next five years the export will reduced due to extra tax levied by importing co...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 258, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'deal'.
Suggestion: deal
...government is investing and planning to deals with the problems of depleting water so...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 417, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... government on the other hand is facing a epidemic disease that has caused millio...
^
Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e problems as well as current problems.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, then, well, for example, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86989795918 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61189485657 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4801988924 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.055555556 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 5.13820224719 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165165300539 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555785891051 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493281419928 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110087836374 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523990110902 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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