Tpo30-Integrated

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Tpo30-Integrated

The reading passage argues the expressed information by ancient historians about Greeks weapon as burning mirror which used to persevere the port city of Syracuse from roman navy attack base on three reasons. however, the professor depicts his disagreement about mentioned points in the reading. First of all, the reading mentions to technological side of this weapon which there is no correspondence between the required technology to built this mirror with the level of Greeks’ technology. furthermore, burning mirror should be wide and contains parabolic curvature to absorb the sunlight to set fire that ancient world couldn’t support this technology. however, the professor explains to other side of this point. In his opinion, even small and flat piece of mirror can be effective to create fire. Thus, repudiation the use of mirror due to technological side seems senseless. As a second reason, the passage refers to required time by this mirror which took ten minutes in the thirteen meters. It means that this weapon was ineffectual to use in the fight to cease the enemy. The lecturer refers to ten minutes to kindle the wood while second minutes can be sufficient to set fire the other materials that Romans had used to build the boats and ships. So, fire could spread to other parts and woods even in the moving ships. furthermore, the passage explains other advance weapon that was ordinary on the Greeks. In fact, Greeks needed no other tools to set fire by using flaming arrow which had same function with burning mirror at the same distance. base on the professor’s idea, Greeks were familiar with flaming arrows and they were skillful about using that but burning mirror was a fascinating tools for them. Therefore, Greeks’ prefer was debated tool.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...oman navy attack base on three reasons. however, the professor depicts his disagreement...
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Line 1, column 498, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...h the level of Greeks' technology. furthermore, burning mirror should be wide and cont...
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Line 1, column 667, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... couldn't support this technology. however, the professor explains to other side o...
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Line 1, column 1341, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...rts and woods even in the moving ships. furthermore, the passage explains other advance wea...
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Line 1, column 1568, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Base
...th burning mirror at the same distance. base on the professor's idea, Greeks we...
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Line 1, column 1721, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'tool'?
Suggestion: tool
...at but burning mirror was a fascinating tools for them. Therefore, Greeks' prefe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, second, so, therefore, thus, while, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11301369863 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69910598336 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527397260274 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6165348185 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5333333333 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34739764737 0.272083759551 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116417817246 0.0996497079465 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796505146794 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.34739764737 0.162205337803 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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