A local college is having an international day You want to speak to students about your country from different cultures Write a letter to the college head In the letter you should tell him her about the topics you are going to talk aboutwhy would they

Dear Sir,

I have been informed by my colleague that your school is organising an event to familiarise the students with diverse culture and countries. I am writing this letter to seek your kind permission to present my country Pakistan and its rich culture in the aforementioned event.

I would be particularly interested in presenting history of the folk music and traditional dance of northern part of our country. Despite these being well known in Asia, these are little known in the Western world. Introducing these to college students on an international day would benefit the participants and presenter alike. This way youngsters would be able to know the existence of variety of cultures and admire the diversity of traditions. Further, getting to know the different culture promote tolerance and result in creating a vibrant, harmonious society.

In order to exhibit the true sense of this century old culture, could you please make the arrangement to provide the display stand where we can display the traditional music equipment such as flute, guitar, piano and costumes of dancers.

I look forward to hearing back from you.

Yours faithfully,
Ammar

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...culture in the aforementioned event. I would be particularly interested in pre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 990.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26595744681 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8582000243 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.691489361702 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3684308811 44.8134815571 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 4.34317383033 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209075287539 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743729092855 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557403759403 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110279308516 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421039234815 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 8.71597938144 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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