Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience Compare the advantages of these two different way | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.

It is undeniable that life is so meaningful and valuable for us but learning about life is difficult as well. We can know knowledge about life through our family, friends and personal experience. In my opinion, I prefer to learn about life through my personal experience because experiences are different from each other and difference of generations has different opinions about life.
Firstly, it is obvious that different people have different altitudes about the same situation because of objective view of each person. It can be due to the habit of each person. For example, I and my friend have some different habits. I love going to the beach; meanwhile, my friend enjoys camping on the mountain. Thus, when I ask her anything about any beach, she just shakes her head and says she doesn’t like any beaches. Sometimes, the different opinion is resulted from different view about someone that people hate or love. For instances, I have a friend, Nga who doesn’t catch her eyes with another friend, Na. Thus, even when Na does a right thing, Nga just thinks it is what everyone does in their lives and when Na does a wrong thing, Nga thinks Na is a bad person who she should avoid playing with. Therefore, I believe that life is what we just can learn through our personal experiences.
The second reason I believe in this idea is that the difference of generations plays an important role in viewing a situation. This is because opinions in the past are much different from recent opinions so it is not suitable to use the beliefs in the past to acknowledge a recent situation. My personal experience is a great example of this. When I left school and prepared for my university study, my parents forced me to register in a medical school. However, I loved becoming a math teacher at that time and my parents said that becoming a teacher couldn’t guarantee me a good future. They did not know that teachers now were paid much. Thus, I think that everything in the life have to be experienced by myself so that I can know more things about life.
In conclusion, I believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience because of different opinions of different people and difference of generation. If I want to know all things about life, no way can replace this way.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71782178218 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63973746812 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482673267327 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.858660922 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364299902078 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120335551111 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128538644453 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287441623436 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176015941774 0.0645574589148 273% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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