Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.
Learning new things is important to make our lives more comfortable and successful. Some people believe that the best way to achieve success or avoid failure, when people are learning about life is either by listening to advice from family and friends or through personal life experience. I think that the best way of learning about life is through personal experiences.
First, sometimes people can learn more from their own mistakes than from people's advice because this aims them to understand that everything in life has cause and effect. Some people are fearless and want to discover life without the guidance of anyone. When a family member or friend advises them, they feel like they have been held back. Moreover, the experience can make people more cautious when they decide to do something that they have never done before. For instance, traveling to another country alone is a big adventure and a dangerous one. However, traveling alone can be a great life experience because some people have found the purpose of their life, to get out of their comfort zone, and gain more self-confidence. Furthermore, these attitudes can only be learned through life experience.
On the other hand, guidance from relatives is a great way to approach different situations. Nevertheless, people's perspectives on life in each situation might be different because life changes over time. For instance, family members or friends might have tried to study when they were young but unfortunately, they could not finish their careers. So, they might advise that studying is hard and difficult and that they might fail as well, but resilience is important not to give up. Therefore, people are aware of the challenges that they can face to gain success. Finally, close people can be resourceful in one way or another. Probably they cannot have the best advice but they have their life experiences and sincere guidance.
Many times people take advice for granted from their family or friends because they want to do everything in their way. Consequently, when these people fail, they feel guilty because they could have avoided it. Finally, learning about life from any type of resource is beneficial for people growing and forming.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...eficial for people growing and forming.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11780821918 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58817264553 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504109589041 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2522146993 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397735814476 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141630033905 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144394670166 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305136867612 0.150856017488 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173158022321 0.0645574589148 268% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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