people today can use internet to learn the life and culture of another country so it cannot be necessary to travel to oter country agree or disagree

The fact that many people today use the internet to experience other countries means that
it is no longer as important to actually travel to those nations. In my opinion, though travel
has its benefits, this is largely true.
Proponents of travel often claim that real life experience trumps virtual experience.
Compare, for instance, the recent Google Museum project which catalogues collections
from famous museums in high resolution photos available to anyone with internet access.
This is no doubt a positive development but it pales in comparison to the experience of
walking through the Louvre and seeing the brushstrokes up close, going on a guided tour,
and talking with other museum-goers. This holds true for a variety of experiences that are
enhanced by being physically present in the moment.
Although there are good reasons to continue to travel on occasion, the internet allows
people to access the majority of the experience remotely. The most salient example of this
is the ubiquity of YouTube for internet users around the world. A child from an
impoverished background, who still has internet access, probably cannot travel to other
countries but they can watch travel documentaries, vlogs, and archived television shows
that show cultures around the world. The makers of these videos not only bring their
experience but also aggregate the most noteworthy events and individuals that even the
most adventurous traveller would have difficulty finding the time to locate.
To conclude, travelling still plays a role in life but the internet has largely replaced its
primary importance in life. There will come a time when the virtual world too fully
overcomes the physical but for the moment it is still beneficial.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...ay use the internet to experience other countries means that it is no longer as importan...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 38, Rule ID: IN_THE_MOMENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at the moment' (=currently)?
Suggestion: at the moment
...e enhanced by being physically present in the moment. Although there are good reasons to co...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, still, for instance, no doubt, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36690647482 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73544063623 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611510791367 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7420820566 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.38176352705 479% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211118131178 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739867939633 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730066537146 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0555231836892 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653872364579 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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