Obesity is a growing problem in the contemporary society. Furthermore, it is having its toll over the health care system, resulting in low birth to motility rate in developed countries. Some belief that by introducing more physical exercise in the early stages of life can rectify this up to an extent. I agree with this notion, however, I opine that there could be better steps taken to mitigate this problem. The below essay will elaborate on my belief and provide relevant examples to better explain the idea.
The habit of unhealthy indulging is catastrophic in the modern world, developed countries are witnessing the full extent of it. In addition to burdening the healthcare system, it holds a financial burden over the country. For instance, USA holds the highest rate of obesity among the other developed countries. Moreover, the motility rate of the country has fallen down by 10% in the recent decade. Begs the question, what will the future hold if this is not taken care of?.
To tackel the issue in hand, many countries have introduced more physical education in the school curriculum, This has more of less produced results in some states. To exemplify, a school in LA downtown has made physical education mandatory from past 8 years, this has curbed the obesity rate in youth up to an extent. Thereby, making a wave to include physical education in school curriculum.
Additionally, there could be better options to tackle this issue. For instance, research shows that the root of increased obesity rate could be contributed to processed sugar. Soda and other product that abuse the use of processed sugar, playing a vital role in increased sugar consumption among the youth. Consequently, resulting in more and more people being overweight. Hence, in my opinion the issue of processed sugar should be addressed first, by forcing the soda companies to use refined sugar instead.
To conclude, Although, physical education in primary school could some what nullify the problem, however, much serious steps are required to curb the problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 12, column 67, Rule ID: SOME_WHAT_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somewhat' (=slightly)?
Suggestion: somewhat
...sical education in primary school could some what nullify the problem, however, much seri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13313609467 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6754609796 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544378698225 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9167893192 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3157894737 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7894736842 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214004198384 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616004352056 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589312624556 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112331164205 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063587143217 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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