Sugar consumption is too harmful Some say it is governments responsibility to limit sugar intake while others say it s individual who are responsible Discuss both the views and give your own opinion

Health should be the first and foremost of an individual or a group of individuals because I believe a healthy person can make a meaningful contribution to society and help this world become a better place to live. However, there are predominantly two contrasting views where a section of society believes that it is the government’s responsibility to limit the sugar intake for their citizens, while others emphasize that people should self-care to keep a healthy diet. In this essay, I will discuss both views in detail.
On the one hand, various factors make a section of people advocate that government should be responsible for taking actions to limit the sugar intake among people. Firstly, they should make laws on food industries to produce less sweetness in goods instead of sugary ones which can be harmful to individuals like a slow poison. Moreover, nation leaders should motivate their citizens to lead a healthy life by using less sugar or free sugar products. For example, the government should encourage factories and companies to produce low-sweet juices and bring healthy goods to the market. Consequently, it will be used by the general public and such products will protect themselves from over-consumption of sugary foods and drinks.
On the other hand, some believe that individuals should take their own responsibility in taking care of less consumption of sugar for myriad reasons. Chiefly, it is essential for every person to bring a change in their diet, keeping in mind the importance of fitness, and reduce the intake of sugar. Indubitably, excessive consumption of sugar may lead to many diseases such as obesity problems, tooth decay, diabetes, and heart-related problems. For instance, according to a BBC survey in America more than 40 percent of youngsters population facing problems with excessive fat and tooth decay problems for the past two decades.
In my profound opinion, the government should take a few leads to limit the sugar intake among citizens of their nation. However, I think a person should be responsible for taking care of his or her diet while consuming an adequate amount of sugar in his or her body.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...quate amount of sugar in his or her body
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99435028249 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74207513183 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508474576271 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 354.0 20.2975951904 1744% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1768.0 106.682146367 1657% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 354.0 20.7667163134 1705% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 136.0 7.06120827912 1926% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254978140992 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.254978140992 0.084324248473 302% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166078293567 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288488344136 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 179.1 13.0946893788 1368% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -287.83 50.2224549098 -573% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 141.3 11.3001002004 1250% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.14 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 24.58 8.58950901804 286% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 9.78957915832 572% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 143.6 10.1190380762 1419% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 25.0 10.7795591182 232% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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