The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist faciliteis. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The two maps provide the information about an island before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
From the maps, it can be clearly seen that there has been a significant development in the island. Before the construction, there were only some trees in the island whereas after construction, many things are added up. Restaurant has been established near the bank of sea and several houses for accommodation have also been built in the island where the houses are accessible through the footpath. Some important things to note down after the development are that there is now a reception building at the centre of the island and a swimming facility near the beach. Furthermore, vehicle track has also been constructed to link reception and restaurant from outside through ship and bridge. The most surprising thing to notice is that trees have not been cut down in the name of development.
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Comments
I would have added more
I would have added more details with locations, if north direction had been shown on the map. I read the sample essay you provided but in the essay, writer has assumed the direction himself. So, if the direction is not given in the map, could we assume the direction ourselves?
Yes, you can give directions.
Yes, you can give directions. and the problem is that you lost some details. for example, you wrote:
'Before the construction, there were only some trees in the island whereas after construction, many things are added up.'
actually, there is a beach too before and after the construction.
flaws:
No. of Words: 151 200 //you lost a lot of details. read a sample:
http://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-i-essays/two-maps-below-show-…
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 151 200
No. of Characters: 744 1000
No. of Different Words: 88 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.505 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.927 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.748 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 47 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.039 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.479 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 4