Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects of the way young people behave. Agree or disagree?
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated where we live, technology and its rapid development affect many aspects of individuals’ life like the way that they behave and communicate with each other. While some people hold the opinion that Movies and television as a product of technology development may have a positive effect on youngster’s behavior, others stand on the other side of the continuum, believing otherwise. As far as I am concerned, I assume that the positive effect of movies and television outweigh their disadvantages. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborate upon hereunder.
To begin with, Movies and television have broadened the scope of an individual’s knowledge and information which has a positive effect on people's behavior. It is crystal clear that when people’s knowledge and information on different subject matters enhance, their behavior and demeanor will alter as a result. In other words, the more information they grasp through media, the more positive behavior they will learn. An example can drive this notion home. When l was 19, I used to watch a Korean drama, named evil eye that was about people’s behavior and its consequences. That drama had a drastic impact on my personality because l was learned how my negligible fault and bad manner change other’s mental health and even deteriorate their condition. Having watched that drama, I was encouraged to watch more movies and read more books on that concept and get more acquainted with healthy and positive behavior. If I did not watch that specific drama, I could not reach such profound information about the positive manner which one must-have.
Furthermore, young people can obtain constructive knowledge in the course of practical experience through movies and television. In recent years, the Media have tried to produce such movies that have focused on those people who discriminated against based on sexual orientation. The juvenile can get familiar with the social categories and the discrimination and restriction were applied toward members of this specific group. Having been involved with more movies and TV series in social groups and categories, youngsters find out more knowledge in social comprehensive. For instance, my roommate has watch movie an American movie in which two men develop an emotional relationship. She explained to me that, in the movie, they encounter many problems in their live stream because of their restricted community. After that, she decided to become an activist in LGBT rights and change her major. Had not watch such a movie, she could not change her mind and become a prosperous activist.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that movies and television have a positive effect on the way youths behave. Not only broadening one's knowledge and information will positively influence their behavior, but also learning various practical experiences can affect their behavior efficiently and effectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2570.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38784067086 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97779979884 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53249475891 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9345943411 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.818181818 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6818181818 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291760238163 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869773277392 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948534393838 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19144979054 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401282342426 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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