You have the opportunity to stay in a country that you have never been to Which country would you like to visit Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice

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You have the opportunity to stay in a country that you have never been to. Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

There are more than hundreds of countries in the world and everyone has their favourite country which they always dream of to visit it. In my opinion, if I have the chance to stay in a country that I have never been to I would choose to visit Saudi Arabia. In the following essay I intend to put forth my opinion to support my view.

To begin with, Saudi Arabia is very close to my heart because there are holy cities which are significant for Muslims. These cities are the Mecca and Madinah where a grand get together of Muslims occur every year that is called Hajj. People from all over the world gathered there to perform this holy ritual. Last year my friend visited Saudi Arabia so she shared her great experince with me. She have been to Mecca to perform Hajj and it was a magneficient experinced of her life. The place is very organized and clean. People there were helping and gentle, there were no boundries among rich and poor and there was no racism. Therefore, I aslo wanted to perform Hajj so that I could experienced all this Holy spirit by myself.

In addition, Saudi Arab is also known for it historical importance where many crucial historical revolutions took place. It was the first place where religion of Islam was first introduce therefore, it is of great importance. Also there are certain places in the country that brings out the holy spirit of Muslims. To exemplify, there is a well known as old as 4000 years where is holy water called zam zam. Also there is Kaabah which is called the House of God which was built thousands years by our prophet. This house of God is famous for two reasons one is of holy importance for the Muslims and second according to science it is the center of the Earth. Consequently, to look all these facts I like to visit that country.

In conclusion, I like to visit Saudia Arabia because I have never been there. This is because, it has Holy place Mecca which is of great importance for Muslims, and because it has many histroical places which brings out holy spirit.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...shared her great experince with me. She have been to Mecca to perform Hajj and it wa...
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Line 3, column 686, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'experience'
Suggestion: experience
... wanted to perform Hajj so that I could experienced all this Holy spirit by myself. In ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e therefore, it is of great importance. Also there are certain places in the country...
^^^^
Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: zam
...s 4000 years where is holy water called zam zam. Also there is Kaabah which is called t...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ars where is holy water called zam zam. Also there is Kaabah which is called the Hou...
^^^^
Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'placed'.
Suggestion: placed
...een there. This is because, it has Holy place Mecca which is of great importance for ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53260869565 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32892325048 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472826086957 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.5878596488 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.4 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156132031698 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533346905582 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839638041695 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12104915545 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843069046498 0.0645574589148 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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