It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
In the era of development, the education for children on how to distinguish right and wrong behaviour at an early age is dispensable and punishment is believed to play an important role in this distinction. Despite the advantage of punishment, it is more convincing to argue that the negative effects it brings outweigh the benefit. Moreover, some suitable methods for adults to punish children will be suggested.
Punishment can be considered a quick and traditional method for parents and teachers to educate their children on realizing whether their behaviour is right or wrong so that they can repair their mistakes. One illustration for that is every school has rules which are corresponding to punishments. In other words, when students break the rules, like being late at school, they are responsible for their mistake by being disciplined with the penalty school imposed. Hence, due to the fear of being punished, students tend to comply with the right things and stay away from negative behaviours.
However, punishing children during their childhood might result in various deleterious influences on their cognitive process, which directly affect their behaviour in the future. A notable disadvantage is that it is able to be a mental barrier for adolescents so that they are afraid of experiencing new things. Being punished regularly at an early age, children have grown up with the fear of making mistakes that lead to their discouragement when facing difficulty. Furthermore, wrong measures of discipline can cause frustration from children to their parents. Because of the immaturity of teenagers, they usually consider their actions always right and against their parents regardless of the harms with the view of proving themselves to adults.
In conclusion, although punishment is inevitable in education, the deleterious sides related to the mental health of children it brings back still outstrip its advantage. Therefore, adults should consider and adjust measures of discipline they apply in order to be suitable to their child’s characteristics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4427244582 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00540270796 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560371517028 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4958018952 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.571428571 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199624206222 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742930768367 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07263296699 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135697165694 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691996823176 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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