Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Nowadays, parents have opposition in teaching their children. Some think children could feel free to make flaws, while opponents believe that children should not be allowed to make any mistakes. As far as I am concerned, I advocate that parents should prevent children from making mistakes but incompletely.
There are many reasons why a mistake should be prevented at an early age. First, if children realize that they could make mistakes easily, the prospect of repeating the faults will increase. A child who has a strict upbringing is less likely to make mistakes over and over again since he or she can envisage the consequence that may occur. Otherwise, they do not feel guilty about their actions. For example, a children throwes trash away intentionally. If their parents do not alarm them that it is bad behaviour, the impacts would be detrimental. Moreover, small mistakes could accumulate to build their behaviours and personalities. In other words, children would be careful with their actions in the future. Some medical errors still exist due to the lack of responsibility of medical workers. Hence, cognition about mistakes is essential in childhood development.
On the other hand, if adults prevent children from having faults completely, there would be consequences. First, a mistake is a lesson; once children expose to them, they will recognise them. Some parents are too strict with their children, and they become aggressive or violent once their daughters or sons make mistakes. It may render scary psychology in children's childhood. When becoming older, the child might be reluctant to face any tricky situations due to the past nightmare that parents created for them. By contrast, other children may be brave and eager to challenge themselves.
In conclusion, children should not make mistakes freely, but parents should create opportunities for them to expose to mistake and teach them how to avoid repeating them once more times.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 410, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25159235669 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77324906594 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563694267516 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7891865383 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.45 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348296602856 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111773172748 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877828517489 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253362329212 0.151304729494 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09241262488 0.056905535591 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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