There is always time for reading history or solving difficult physics problems or drawing difficult mathematical charts, but if we want to have a happier and more progressive generation the best time is when they are between 5-10 years old. In my opinion, young school children should be free to study everything they love, especially more artistic topics such as music.
To begin with, 5-10 years old children want to explore their huge surrounding world with their senses and release their emotions. This goal can be achieved only by touching or listening to the environment. We must find a good way to direct them to improve their abilities and talents. The best thing we can do is to educate them in schools to release their impressions by arts. Once they learn about music they will be better listeners and after painting, they will know how to look into the soul of nature! In this scenario, there will be many functional students, who can make progress much better than dejected ones.
Furthermore, young kids are energetic, curious, and creative, their hunger for learning every skill should not be restricted to boring lessons such as math and science. As a matter of fact, when we limit their activities we extinguished the fire of their passion. Soon they are going to be dejected unhappy children with a lot of mental illnesses such as depression. This situation continues to them hate even math and science because they imagine these things are the reasons for their sadness. But what would happen if we encourage them instead of controlling their interests? At this point, the students who feel better about themselves will be able to follow their passions and enjoy a better life, due to this reasoning they will be healthier in mind and live a more joyful life. This can cause them to be even better at more logical subjects due to their motivated mentality.
To wrap it up, it is beneficial for elementary school children to be taught about art and music along with science and math. Not only can this idea satisfy their needs for expressing their feelings and enhancing their sensings, but also it helps them expand their abilities and understand their skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, such as, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90207715134 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47840038236 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575667655786 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.852584197 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.133333333 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143366568514 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606787038203 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693306409016 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100931513228 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148102296851 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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