Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Younger school children (aged five to ten) should be
required to study art and music in addition to math,
science, history and language.
Modern educators have realized the importance of building and using a well-rounded teaching curriculum to help children promote broader understanding and appreciation of this world. I feel that this is essential for young children aged five to ten to give them art classes. because this will equip and prepare these children for a bright and prosperous life in the future.
A key ingredient for elementary and secondary education is communication. Proper communication allows people to understand peers and logically articulate thoughts and emotions. Subjects like art and music are, in fact, the methods of communication. For example, a performing artist communicates with audiences by moving arms and legs, using specific facial expressions, and wearing different style clothes. A painter exchanges his emotion and feeling with others by using various colors, arranging people or objects in a special way, or painting on various materials. No one can deny that there exist various ways to express people themselves. it would be beneficial if one can find multiple ways to communicate with others out of his world. I still remember when I was in elementary school, my parents encouraged me to study dancing and ukulele, which I am not familiar with. In the beginning, it was indeed a tough period since I had to take extra classes every day after school. However, not until I broke up with my boyfriend can I realized how useful music and dance is. when I felt upset and down, I would like to play the ukulele or dancing with the music, then sharing my video with friends and families. they all cheered and encouraged me, which definitely helped me to get through that dark period.
Another reason to support my assertion is that art classed bring practical benefits as well, even though they are not directly related to numeracy, scientific know-how, or literacy, which many parents believe are essential in preparation for employment. For instance, playing musical instruments can train students' eye-hand coordination, which can be useful for careers such as medical professionals, engineers, or technicians. Besides, pottery and porcelain making can enhance the cooperation between the left and the right brain, thereby enabling students to come up with more creative solutions to problems. Obviously, studying arts contributes a lot to children's practical skills.
From the reasons and illustrations I have given above, I would reiterate my opinion that I strongly recommend students aged five to ten study art in school because it enables them to have multiple ways to express themselves and foster some practical skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, second, so, still, then, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30238095238 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91578217881 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607142857143 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1288263978 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.35 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163053187253 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492367984661 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457283941011 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10227433718 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150102667802 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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