Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows T

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Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows. There are, however, several solutions that responsible businesses can use to prevent injuries to birds.
One-Way Glass
One solution is to replace the regular, clear glass with one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. The occupants of the building can see out, but birds and others cannot see in. If birds cannot see through a window, they will understand that the glass forms a solid barrier and will not try to fly through it.
Colorful Designs
A second solution is to paint colorful lines or other designs on regular window glass. For example, a window could have a design of thin stripes painted over the glass. People would still be able to see through the openings in the design where there is no paint, while birds would see the stripes and thus avoid trying to fly through the glass. Architects can be encouraged to include colorful painted patterns on glass as part of the general design of buildings.
Magnetic Field
The third solution is to create an artificial magnetic field to guide birds away from buildings. Humans use an instrument called a magnetic compass to determine directions—either north, south, east, or west. Bird research has shown that birds have a natural ability to sense Earth’s magnetic fields; this ability works just like a compass, and it helps birds navigate in the right direction when they fly. A building in a bird flight path can be equipped with powerful electromagnets that emit magnetic signals that steer birds in a direction away from the building.

The article and the lecture both deal with solutions to prevent birds getting injured by flying through glass windows. Whilst the author proposed three possible solutions, the lecture contradicts his arguments respectively.

First, the writer states that one-way glass can be one solution, as the bird cannot see through a window and will avoid flying through it. In contrast, the speaker argues that this solution will not be effective, because one-way glass usually looks like a mirror from outside. The reflecting sky and trees can mislead bird to fly through the glass.

Second, the author mentions that colorful designs, such as colorful lines paint on regular glass can prevent bird from getting harmed, but not interfering people inside the building to see out. However, the professor questions this argument by saying that birds will opening between the stripes as holes that they will still try to fly through. Furthermore, she adds that the only way to keep birds away from the openings is by narrowing down the intervals, which will result in the darkness inside the building.

Last, the writer asserts that magnetic field can be equipped on buildings which is in the flight path of birds to guide them away from the buildings. As opposed to the author, the lecturer maintains that birds only use magnetic field for navigation during long distance immigration. They use lights for determining directions when flying from one site in city to another.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 268, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'open'
Suggestion: open
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Line 8, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ngs which is in the flight path of birds to guide them away from the buildings. A...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, look, second, so, still, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 239.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1589958159 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45255392304 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594142259414 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 348.3 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4263715358 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.090909091 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7272727273 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287517588323 0.272083759551 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112899618104 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634679175356 0.0662205650399 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164322592093 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393827630107 0.0443174109184 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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