Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Some have voiced support that juveniles should contribute to the community by taking part in unpaid work in their leisure time as it is greatly beneficial for both themselves and society. In my opinion, this is a matter of debate in light of different factors before any conclusion can be drawn.
There are various compelling reasons why teenagers should spend their leisure time on doing unpaid work for the community. To begin with, this is a great opportunity for them to gain some practical working experience. Through these kinds of activities, they may face certain challenges which would help sharpen their soft skills and widen their horizons as well as having a multi-dimensional view when evaluating and tackling the problems. For example, in some developed countries such as America or Australia, teenagers will take part in some church activities including cleaning, decorating for special occasions and giving a hand in some team works. That would help then enhance their problem-solving skills and the ability to work with each other as a team. Another noteworthy benefit that should be taken into consideration is that when contributing for the society, those juveniles will learn how to love and share with people around them leading to a healthy mind and friendly society.
On the other hand, teenagers should enjoy their free time in the ways they want. As for most of the parts they are fully occupied with their hectic schedules at school, so it is unfair to ask them to work without payment. They have the rights to hang out with their friends or play sports to blow off some steam and achieve great physical and mental development. Provided that fact that they join in the community work without payment, they will get exhausted and that might affect their daily routine, and in the worst-case scenario, that would have negative influence on their academic performance. For instance, in some cultures, teenagers have to spend their holidays working for the pagodas or temples from 4.30 in the morning until 7.30 in the evening and they have to go to bed at 8 o’clock. Although this is truly a meaningful activity, it severely impacts their biological time and makes them feel extremely tired after the holidays.
In conclusion, while some have voiced support that juveniles should join in community work without payment in their leisure time, I would argue that it is better to let them enjoy the time in the ways they want.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...enjoy the time in the ways they want.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, then, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 411.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61447269388 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540145985401 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1810523296 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.0 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282857942707 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103965701383 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640212143058 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18485881331 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021986439182 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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