The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy

Essay topics:

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

The charts compare the outcomes of a survey conducted between people of two different age groups about the reasons behind their happiness.

Overall, it can be seen that achievement at work made people of both age groups happier while other factors were the least source of happiness for them.

Achievement at work accounted for nearly a quarter of happiness in both age groups which was 31% for younger group and 32% for older people. Similarlly, 24% of people above the age 30 stated that dong hobbies made them happy as compared to 22% for people below the age 30.

On the other hand, travelling also made young adults happier which represented 15%, however, for the old ones, staying with family was a way of being happy which accounted for 14%. Likewise, 18% of young adults voted good opportunities as a way of being happy whereas 20% of older people voted having financial security as a means of happiness. Lastly, the least percentage of happiness in younger and older adults was from other factors which represented 14% and 10% respectively.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (189 votes)
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, lastly, likewise, so, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 882.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92737430168 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53569751106 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569832402235 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 16.2994929181 43.030603864 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 126.0 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5714285714 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 5.23603664747 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177342838505 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983200800887 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971691391044 0.0843802449381 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145209534957 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0966057835547 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.