Some people believe that museum should introduce the culture and civilization of their own country, while some others believe that museum should represent the culture and civilization of all nations. Which side do you agree with express your reason?
In the season tourist, tourists usually visit the museum. The museum has an extensive collection of objects that can represent civilization and culture. Some people believe that museum should introduce the culture and civilization of their own country, while the others believe that museum should represent the culture and civilization of all nations. I agree with the latter group for two logical reasons.
The first group has regarded the museum with a local view, and they claim that although the second group idea is more universal than their idea, they should incur tremendous costs to having a museum that introduce the culture and civilization of all nations in the every metropolis. Of course, the first group idea may seem right to some extents but I believe that the second group idea can improve economic conditions, and even it is possible for visitors to becoming familiar with cultures and civilizations without wasting their money and time.
Firstly, it can improve economic conditions because of being plenty of tourists. Although it is more expensive to there are extensive collections of objects in the museum, the plenty of tourists compensate for all of heavy costs. Many foreign tourists visit the museum annually that it can result in having the famous museum. So the museum that represents culture and civilization of all nations can improve the economic climate.
In other hand, the museum that represents cultures and civilizations of all nations can result in not wasting money and time. Tourists become familiar with cultures and civilizations that are introduced by the museum without marginal expenditures of traveling, hotel etc. Archaeologist, historians and other relevant experts can study on cultures and civilizations that are represented by the museum without any traveling across the world. So people become familiar with cultures and civilizations that are represented without wasting their money and time.
In summary, although some people attend to the museum that introduce culture and civilization of their own country, but I believe that the museum that introduce culture and civilization of all the nations can result in improving economic climate for government and wasting money and time for tourists.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'in summary', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.269633507853 0.229887763892 117% => OK
Verbs: 0.133507853403 0.158761421928 84% => OK
Adjectives: 0.086387434555 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.020942408377 0.046263068375 45% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0366492146597 0.0685040099705 53% => OK
Prepositions: 0.149214659686 0.118717715034 126% => OK
Participles: 0.0392670157068 0.0351676179071 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76954892098 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0130890052356 0.0309702414327 42% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.104712041885 0.0887237588012 118% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0314136125654 0.0209618222197 150% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0157068062827 0.0139019557991 113% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2263.0 2387.08602151 95% => OK
No of words: 354.0 408.028673835 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.39265536723 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.432203389831 0.338922669872 128% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.327683615819 0.251872472559 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.220338983051 0.174417080927 126% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.121468926554 0.112833075102 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76954892098 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387005649718 0.524397521467 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 39.1492088785 59.2087087015 66% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 23.6 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.3099389902 48.84282405 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.866666667 120.699889404 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.644075263715 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 56.3683615819 45.7405998639 123% => OK
Elegance: 2.39726027397 1.45489161554 165% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.578554411979 0.300154397459 193% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.233110025112 0.103427244359 225% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.105178939214 0.0752933317313 140% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.674847242537 0.497263757937 136% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.159692098147 0.151897553556 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.276748204987 0.114077575197 243% => Sentence topic similarity is too high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.193756053603 0.0781384742642 248% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.421843458524 0.336927656856 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0663469718362 0.067059652881 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.439271948658 0.210909579961 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.163540902059 0.0618886996521 264% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 8.42114695341 36% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 4.0 13.6433691756 29% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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