"Your recent article on corporate downsizing* in the United States is misleading. The article 174 gives the mistaken impression that many competent workers who lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before fin

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"Your recent article on corporate downsizing* in the United States is misleading. The article 174 gives the mistaken impression that many competent workers who lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before finding other suitable employment. But this impression is contradicted by a recent report on the United States economy, which found that since 1992 far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated. The report also demonstrates that many of those who lost their jobs have found new employment. Two-thirds of the newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above-average wages, and the vast majority of these jobs are full-time.

This editorial disagrees with a certain article's claim that as a result of widespread corporate downsizing many able workers have faced serious long-term economic hardship--due to their inability to find other suitable employment. To justify its disagreement with this daim the editorial cites the following three findings of a recent report: (1) There has been a net increase in the number of new jobs created since 1992, (2) many workers who lost their jobs have found other work, and (3) most newly created jobs are full-time positions in industries which tend to pay above-average wages. Careful scrutiny of these findings, however, reveals that they accomplish little toward refuting the article's claim.

Regarding the first finding, the editorial overlooks the possibility that most of the newly created jobs since 1992 are not suitable for job-seekers downsized by corporations. Perhaps the vast majority of these jobs involve food serving, clerical assistance, deanmg and maintenance, and other tasks requiring a low level of skill and experience. At the same 6me, perhaps most downsized job-seekers are highly educated middle-managers looking for the same type of work elsewhere. In short, lacking evidence that the newly created jobs match the skills, experience, and interests of the downsized corporate employees, the editorial's author cannot convincingly refute the article's claim.

As for the second finding, the term "many" is far too vague to allow for any meaningful conclusions; if "many" amounts to an insignificant percentage of downsized employees, then the finding is of little use in refuting the article's claim. Moreover, the workers to whom this finding refers are not necessarily downsized corporate employees. To the extent that they are not, this second finding is irrelevant in drawing any conclusions about the impact of corporate downsizing on downsized employees.

The third finding would lend support to the author's position only under two assumptions: (1) that the newly created jobs in those high-paying industries are suitable for downsized corporate employees, and (2) that the new jobs are among the high-paying ones. Otherwise, downsized employees seeking jobs would be unlikely to regain their former economic status by applying for these newly created positions, whether or not these positions are full-time. In sum, the author has not effectively refuted the article's claim that corporate downsizing has worked economic hardship on downsized corporate employees.

To more effectively refute the claim the author should provide clear evidence that most of those job-seekers are able to fill the sorts of new jobs that have been created since 1992, and that these new positions are suitable for those job-seekers given their work experience, areas of interest, and former salaries.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...aced serious long term economic hardship due to their inability to find other sui...
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...owing three findings of a recent report: 1 There has been a net increase in the ...
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...ng three findings of a recent report: 1 There has been a net increase in the num...
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...e number of new jobs created since 1992, 2 many workers who lost their jobs have...
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...umber of new jobs created since 1992, 2 many workers who lost their jobs have fo...
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...st their jobs have found other work, and 3 most newly created jobs are full time...
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...their jobs have found other work, and 3 most newly created jobs are full time po...
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...ward refuting the article's claim. Regarding the first finding, the editor...
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...cingly refute the article's claim. As for the second finding, the term &apo...
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...rate downsizing on downsized employees. The third finding would lend support to ...
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...s;s position only under two assumptions: 1 that the newly created jobs in those ...
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... position only under two assumptions: 1 that the newly created jobs in those hig...
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...e for downsized corporate employees, and 2 that the new jobs are among the high ...
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...or downsized corporate employees, and 2 that the new jobs are among the high pay...
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...ying for these newly created positions, whether or not these positions are full time. In sum...
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...ons, whether or not these positions are full time. In sum, the author has not effective...
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...r or not these positions are full time. In sum, the author has not effectively r...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'as for', 'in short', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.132575757576 0.15541462614 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.138257575758 0.0836205057962 165% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0530303030303 0.0520304965353 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0132575757576 0.0272364105082 49% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107954545455 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0530303030303 0.0416121511921 127% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.96900357082 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0227272727273 0.026700313972 85% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.100378787879 0.113004496875 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00757575757576 0.0255425247493 30% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00757575757576 0.0127820249294 59% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2904.0 2731.13054187 106% => OK
No of words: 446.0 446.07635468 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.51121076233 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396860986547 0.378187486979 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.322869955157 0.287650121315 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.237668161435 0.208842608468 114% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.177130044843 0.135150697306 131% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96900357082 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 207.018472906 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482062780269 0.469332199767 103% => OK
Word variations: 53.9929603869 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 31.8571428571 23.2022227129 137% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.8738426239 57.7814097925 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 207.428571429 141.986410481 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8571428571 23.2022227129 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.928571428571 0.724660767414 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 3.58251231527 502% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 64.1441383728 51.9672348444 123% => OK
Elegance: 2.06666666667 1.8405768891 112% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408280026596 0.441005458295 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.143853070794 0.135418324435 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.076548652005 0.0829849096947 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.649000413652 0.58762219726 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157603527824 0.147661913831 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196416919218 0.193483328276 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847429411465 0.0970749176394 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.38578442403 0.42659136922 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0379942431569 0.0774707102158 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276964463461 0.312017818177 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625106284194 0.0698173142475 90% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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