Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people s health Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health.
Do you agree or disagree?

Some people hold a view that shops should be prohibited from selling unhealthy food and beverages. While this viewpoint is justifiable to some extent, I believe that these types of food could be displayed in market.
The first and foremost reason as to why unhealthy food and drinks should be banned is that they lead to deterioration in health. Science has proven that people who eat food that has minimum quantity of nutrients and high amount of harmful contents can have higher chances of developing some chronical illnesses such as heart diseases, diabetes, some forms of cancer and obesity. Therfore, imposing a ban on selling unhealthy foods or drinks could bar the body from potential health concerns as well as reduce the medical costs which is paid by public health center in the long run.
However, unhealthy food shouldn’t be banned for some reasons. As many people today lead a hectic lifestyle, it would mean that not all could have enough time enjoy a proper meal which rich in nutrients and vitamins. They have no choices but eat hamburger or pizza to gain some energy and continue working, although they are fully aware of its potential health-damaging consequences. Secondly, many big fast-food companies such as Mc Donald and KFC contribute a significant part for the economy a country. If governments did not allow them to sell any fast-food, it would lead to some serious drawbacks, such as the negative impact on national GDP or the rise of the unemployment rate.
In conclusion, eating a moderate amount of junk food is acceptable and the government should propose some policies that controlled these kinds of food consumed in shops.

Votes
Average: 7.7 (8 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01444043321 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74153915917 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610108303249 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.7898173904 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.272727273 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1818181818 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.18181818182 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331435359435 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131183272929 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850661306781 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203963763986 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722267258824 0.056905535591 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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