Children today are not as fit and healthy as in the past. Discuss the causes for this situation with relevant examples and give your opinion on possible solutions.
Gone are the days when people were prosperous regarding health. Nowadays, changes in the lifestyle on account of modernity have contributed greatly to trigger several health problems to mankind especially children. The problems among adolescent like obesity, weak optics, psychological and physical weakness, lower immune system, spinal problem are on the rise. It has been very difficult for today's societies to combat with health issues. Here, i will establish causes and some remedies to address this global concern.
to commence with, there are multifarious reasons behind unhealthy offspring...
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Tnx very much sir..!! I m
Tnx very much sir..!! I m delighted to get 8.5 score ..!!
Do number of ideas for each essay matter ?? for examp.-if I have only 3 ideas how much score I ll get ??
if I have 5 ideas how much I will deserve ??
You will not get higher marks
You will not get higher marks because you have more ideas.
Better to have two to three ideas in 5 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion
flaws:
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
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Score: 8.5 out of 9
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 488 350
No. of Characters: 2628 1500
No. of Different Words: 299 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.7 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.385 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.684 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 225 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 177 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 118 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.217 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.988 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.522 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.255 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.457 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5