Success in life comes from hard work and determination.
Some people believe that diligence and determination is the most important element brings about the success, while the opponents of this idea think money and appearance is more convinced. While I accept that money and appearance can help reaching the success more easily, I would argue hard work and determination is the most essential factors.
Substance and the look can give me the success in some situations. Firstly, money is a good condition to perform the big plan and build up a comfortable life. As we know, to follow a big project, money is the very important require. It helps businessman invest and get profit. Besides, the abundance of finance gives people chances to pursuit their hobbies. Secondly, good appearance is also a great advantage because people always tend to be attracted by beautiful person. As a result, good-looking people will have sympathy from others so everything in their life maybe more fluently. Hence, they will feel happy and confident.
However, in my opinion, diligence and determination is much more respectful. Hardworking is necessary for people to reach success. Because if people do not practicing, they will not have enough knowledge and skills to grow in their career. Even though they have natural talent, it cannot be shown or developed without their training. Besides, determination is also an indispensable factor make your career brilliantly. Impediments always appear in the way to success. Determination can give people a strong heart to try to overcome they. Moreover, to become a master of one field, people must practice very hard. So if they are not determined, they cannot hold a successful life.
To conclude, it seems evident that hard work and determination is the most important factorial that decide if people can reach a successful life or not. Money and appearance is just additional factor can help they hold brilliant career quicker.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to reach' or 'reach'.
Suggestion: to reach; reach
...cept that money and appearance can help reaching the success more easily, I would argue ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19417475728 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87785434701 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556634304207 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2656091267 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4285714286 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7142857143 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170695625176 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507355617471 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657411462835 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118628629244 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033025973639 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.23 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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