Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The authors argument that the deer population is dwindling based on the reports by the local hunters may seem logical at first glance but it rests upon some unwarranted assumptions that needs further analysis and data.
First, the scope and validity of the reports by the hunter is questionable. For example, the deer population could have declined because of the hunting activity which might be illegal in that area; hence hunters can fabricate another cause to cover it up. If that is the case then the claim is severely weakened. Thus, authentic data containing the facts and figures of deer population is required.
Secondly, it is nowhere mentioned that the frozen sea is the only mode of transportation for the deer and even if that is true, the melting of sea ice due to global warming is a recent phenomenon. It is highly unlikely to show immediate effects in the population of deer.
It is also possible that the vegetation in that place which the Arctic deer feeds on is depleted due to extreme climates or other reasons. If that is true then the entire belt of Canada arctic region would not have sufficient plants that serves as the food source for the deer, hence the population might have declined due to starvation.
Another probable reason is that while the reports of the population were taken by the hunters, the deer might have not reproduced in that period. For instance, the population might comprise mostly of aged arctic deer that are most likely to die and the lack of reproduction might have further reduce the number and the global warming incidence might have been a coincidence.
Also, there is no proper data to prove that the sea in the Canada's Arctic region also melted due to global warming. It might have just affected the southern pole and not the arctic region. We simply do not know the validity of the report.
Moreover, it is mentioned that the region remains cold only during sometime of the year for the sea to be covered with ice. Thus, during warmer climates, the sea might start gradually melting and the Arctic deer may have another route to move to other islands or they might have deviced a way to procure food. Thus similar method could have been employed by the deer during global warming , and thus it would have not much affected the migration process of the deer.
In conclusion, while the author’s claim is not entirely invalid, he/she must consider all the possible causes for the decrease in deer population in the Canada arctic region. Careful analysis of the reports is required. The author should also exhaustively study all the alternative reasons which might help to bolster his/her argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84868421053 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48209307288 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47149122807 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6875203142 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.55 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194061489837 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562599634844 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477164017665 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897188917186 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516316963267 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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