In this argument, the author claims that the decline in deer populations is due to their inability to cross the frozen sea. He/she supports the claim by pointing to the coincided trend of global warming that may have caused more ice-melting among islands, which prevents the deers from migrating back and forth to search for food. This claim may be sound at first glance, however, more substantial evidence is needed to further confirm its validity.
To begin with, we need evidence to show the validity of local hunters’ reports, which suggest the decline in deer population. If the report is only submitted by a few hunters and does not represent a larger population of hunters’ opinion, it is highly possible that these few hunters miscounted during their hunting that led them to believe there is a decline. On the other hand, if there is evidence from the majority of hunters who concur that there is a decline, then it would be reasonable to start looking for reasons behind the decline.
In addition, evidence that confirms actual ice melting in the deers’ habitat is needed. The author only claims that the global warming trends have led to sea ice melting, yet he/she did not specify the exact areas where sea ice melted. If conservationists do find that there is a significant melting of ice in the deers’ habitat, then the author’s argument will be strengthened. However, if only an inconsequential amount of ice melting is discovered, then the claim that global warming has led to the decline of deer population is untenable
Furthermore, even if the trend of global warming does have an effect, more evidence is still needed to confirm that the deers’ population decline due to their inability to migrate to neighbor islands to forage. If evidence shows that global warming has in fact rendered the extinction of the plants that deers feed on, then the cause of deers’ decline in population could be lack of food source, rather than the inability to follow migration patterns.
In conclusion, the author’s claim is based on some unsubstantiated assumptions and further evidence is needed in order to evaluate the validity of his/her claim on the cause of deer population’s decline.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1782 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.79 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.614 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.615 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.176 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.402 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.666 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.196 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In this argument, the author claims that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 369.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11924119241 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9211351818 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476964769648 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.8840489753 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.416666667 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.75 23.324526521 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8333333333 5.70786347227 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171263695017 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713313487037 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358236924372 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0969157010044 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359766787819 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.3799401198 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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