The argument states the problem of decreasing revenue due to less amount of soya used in a food manufacturing company and suggestions to combat this issue. A company named Braeburn Corporation is a food manufacturing company which use less soya ratio to make their products. Soya improves health and lessens the cancer risks. The author argues that the advantage of using more soya ratio and their contribution to improving cancer risk will help to popularize their products and eventually their revenue will increase. The arguments seem agreeable but careful reading of the same leave some question to doubt it.
The author should mention the popularity of Braeburn Corporation and inclination if people to buy their products. Reasons to decline in revenue cannot be justified only by examining the ratio of raw materials. It is possible that people like the taste with less soya in their food product and increase in soy might change the taste of the food product due to which the company might be having chances of losing customers. It is mentioned here that soy products are good for health and decreases the risk of cancer but the rate that is salubrious is not mentioned here. If they are using the correct ratio of soya and increase in the same affects the health, then the argument will be abortive.
The revenue declination can have many reasons except less amount of soya. Food companies are having great competition nowadays and people are eclectic in their food choices. It might be possible that they are having another competitor which attracts the customers more and getting popularized widely. In that case, increase in soya amount will not affect the customers and Braeburn Corporation must apply other strategies to gain profit. The competitor might be spreading awareness of using soy products to reduce cancer risk so in that case, they should also imply marketing strategies to attract customers.
In sum, it is not feasible to examine the argument from only one point of view. The Braeburn corporation must construe all the aspects of declination in revenue. I disagree with the statement and the author should mention more reasons to justify the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1794 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.983 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.379 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.278 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07777777778 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61687307513 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452777777778 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4070429985 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.555555556 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.27777777778 5.70786347227 22% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24235572005 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770676614036 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551502188124 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151897795166 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530339491494 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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