The city of Winston has two large department stores: Namen and Roscoe. Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions, while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options. Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the growing suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last three years and where the median income is $75,000. Namen’s executives argue that as population and median income increase, people are willing to spend more money on clothing. However, Roscoe’s executives believe that the suburbs are more family oriented, and therefore their store will be more profitable than their competitor Namen.
The City of Winston has two large department store and both wants to open the new shop in a growing suburb, where population increases in last three years up to 50% and median income of that area is $75,000. But the argument can be challenged and really needs more information to check the exact scenario and outcomes, before they move in for such a hug investment.
First thing first, there is no statistical data presented which shows the comparison of the people living in Winston to the people living in suburb of Salem. The argument needs some more details statistics, some of which are. Purchasing habits, comparison? Is there any similar store or mall doing same business? If yes, how much profits they are generating, on average. Preference of people about the purchases. If there is no store nearby, where these people are doing purchasing? These all questions needs to be answered, and a proper statistical data would be necessary to support the argument.
Secondly, median, which is $ 75,000, can not give the clear picture of the society's income and their status, however, average or arithmetic mean of their income can be helpful here. Median value, shows an ambiguity, there is a chance that below the median rate the income might be very low might be $ 5,000 to $ 7,000. And obviously, with such low income shop can not target every person there at the suburb. So, we would be needing more promising facts to prove this argument.
Thirdly, as it has been said by Roscoe's executives, "The suburb are more family oriented, and their store will be more profitable than their competitor". It is totally out of blue argument, Despite of being family oriented, they can buy high-end designer fashions. It is totally individual's choice, what he or she needs to wear and what he or she.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 307 350
No. of Characters: 1436 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.186 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.678 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.398 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.296 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...r mall doing same business? If yes, how much profits they are generating, on average...
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Line 9, column 28, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$75'.
Suggestion: $75
...gument. Secondly, median, which is $ 75,000, can not give the clear picture of ...
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Line 9, column 300, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$5'.
Suggestion: $5
...e the income might be very low might be $ 5,000 to $ 7,000. And obviously, with suc...
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Line 9, column 311, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$7'.
Suggestion: $7
...e might be very low might be $ 5,000 to $ 7,000. And obviously, with such low incom...
^^^
Line 9, column 423, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...erson there at the suburb. So, we would be needing more promising facts to prove this argu...
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Line 13, column 99, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...The suburb are more family oriented, and their store will be more profitable than...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90879478827 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61817270321 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586319218241 0.468620217663 125% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5465322083 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6470588235 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0958105659049 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0281222824963 0.0743258471296 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385089023904 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0678841318209 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534235147309 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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