Collectors prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision. Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create these statues. This discovery explains why Kalinese miniature statues were abstract and entirely different in style: molds could be used only for life-size sculptures. It also explains why few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found. In light of this discovery, collectors predict that the life-size sculptures will decrease in value while the miniatures increase in value.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The author’s argument that the value of life-size sculptures will decrease while the value of miniatures will increase is not entirely logically cogent, because it is not strong enough requiring more information and weighting.
The discovery of head’s and hand’s molds can not effectively endorse the conclusion that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies to create life-size sculptures because it was not found any body’s mold, therefore, this conclusion was not efficiently made.
The author implies that the ancient Kalinese artists did not use sculping tools and techniques based in the fact that just few tools were found. This argument is not plausible, perhaps there are a lot of sculping tools hidden that the archaeologists still have not found or the tools may be made of some material that deteriorate so much along the centuries that they just can not be found.
Furthermore, the author does not even address other factors to explain why miniature sculptures are so different in style and abstract. It may be like this because life-size sculptures were used to scare enemies and evil spirits for example. This way they were able to protect their community. Or even they may be some kind of gift to their gods. On the other hand, the miniature sculptures may be used as toys by children, decoration tool or even symbols of people dead from the family.
Although the assumption that the life-sized sculptures were made using molds were reasonable or warranted this not support the argument that the value of it will decrease because a lot of knowledge were required by ancient artists to develop a technique to obtain and use molds to do sculptures.
Hence, the author’s argument that the value of life-size sculptures will decrease while the value of miniatures will increase is not completely sound since the supporting sentences and assumptions are not strong and well related enough.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 315 350
No. of Characters: 1577 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.213 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.006 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.621 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.694 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.399 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...conclusion was not efficiently made. The author implies that the ancient Kalines...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20317460317 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79414497794 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48253968254 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.3714729903 57.8364921388 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6363636364 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149049752235 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587597548945 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501818229517 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0841775487736 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04819400546 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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