Collectors prize the ancient life- size clay statuesof human figuresmade on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision. Since archeologist have recently discoveredmolds of human heads and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create these statues. This discovery explains why few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found. In light of this discovery, collectors predict that the life-size sculptures will decrease in value while the miniatures increase in the value.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions need to be answered in oredr to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how th eanswers to these questions would help to evaluate the [rediction.
Discovering mystery and history of life-size statue and miniature in Kali, the author's conclusion made by full of the assuptions about the tools and molds, and using dubious assumptios to determing the value of acient statues which should be further investigate to strengthen the argument.
The author implies that the discover of molds for human head and hands, which is representative enough to conclude that the acient artists used molds of actual bodies. The archaeologists hasn't found any particular molds that clearly shows the evidence, thus, this could be a false conclusion, we just can not only use two molds of body structure and then predict the human body is also made by the same way. If it is true, the archeaology may find more molds for evidence before drawn this conclusion so hastily. Furthermore, these two mold could only used for learing models, for the beginner to copy, then when molding a new one use their bare hands. If it is true, the conclusion should be reexamined.
What's more, the author suggest that the reason for the miniature were so abstract and entirely different style, strenghen the evidence of using the molds for sculpture. However, what is really determined for all acient goods can not exclude the year of it. While the author didn't mention any of it, we can imagine that the miniature sculpture happended before the life-size statues, which could implies that the Kalinese hasn't form the image of entire body structure, thus all the statue remain abstract type, and also differentiate from life-size statue.
The tools haven't been found may also have many explaination, the storage style of acient Kalinese may be different from us now, thus due to the size of it, the texture, or the importance, or the place with different meaning for storaging, this possible reasons cause the archeaologist never find out. Though the technology now is convenience for discovering the unknown world, the planet still remained secretely. To draw the conclusion about the relationship about the undiscover tools and statues is not strong enough.
Also the correlation between the value of miniatue and life-size statue is unclear, whether the value of these statues were determing by concrete level, or tool used level, or size include. The prediction from the collectors should bring about more criteria of the value level, thus, the prediction can be examined.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 1961 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.915 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.609 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.431 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 293, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...-size statue and miniature in Kali, the authors conclusion made by full of the assuptio...
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Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ng: none;'>The author implies that the discover of molds for human head and hands, whic...
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Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...ds of actual bodies. The archaeologists hasnt found any particular molds that clearly...
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Line 9, column 214, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...'-webkit-font-kerning: none;'>Whats more, the author suggest that the reaso...
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Line 9, column 488, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...xclude the year of it. While the author didnt mention any of it, we can imagine that ...
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Line 9, column 609, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'imply'
Suggestion: imply
...fore the life-size statues, which could implies that the Kalinese hasnt form the image ...
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Line 9, column 635, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
..., which could implies that the Kalinese hasnt form the image of entire body structure...
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Line 13, column 224, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...kit-font-kerning: none;'>The tools havent been found may also have many explainat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, still, then, thus, while, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3988.0 2260.96107784 176% => OK
No of words: 558.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 7.14695340502 5.12650576532 139% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.93289144813 2.78398813304 213% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401433691756 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1008.9 705.55239521 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 55.0 22.8473053892 241% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 407.535716226 57.8364921388 705% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 398.8 119.503703932 334% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.8 23.324526521 239% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.70786347227 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 5.15768463074 174% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.045731345938 0.218282227539 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0221810317243 0.0743258471296 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228968408378 0.0701772020484 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0307049258884 0.128457276422 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191355260559 0.0628817314937 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.1 14.3799401198 279% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -1.27 48.3550499002 -3% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 12.197005988 222% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 25.08 12.5979740519 199% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 67.0 12.3882235529 541% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.0 11.1389221557 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 11.9071856287 202% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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