Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.

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Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.

Being an education institution, it's purpose is to guide students in every field the attend to take part, not to all the way that succeed. while to become a successful person around the world will possibly be the most wanted dream to others, it is healthy that the education institution be an outsider to them, not to say dissuade students to pursuing the unsuccessful area.

For the very beginning, in every life, students learning skills from school, while before they can thinking thoroughly to decide who they want to be or what job they want to take. For which, a 5 years old child like to paint in human structure, do his performance along the riverside, for those who visit her, who can always taking a paint brush and come up with the ideas from nowhere, entertaining people with the vivid picture along to riverside, however to someone, maybe for the institution supervisor, who can decide whether the job could be successful or not, may cut down the role of the child. Not to mention those who are naturally born to be a painter, and now successes in the world, to be a famous painter that everybody knows. thus, to let the education decide which field to develope, which job to take, or which skills to promote, it's not healthy to whole society, not to mention it could kill someone with the natural skills.

it could be nice at the first begining, that everyone can achieve to success without crossing any dead road in life, but what problems could it be? For those field that the society deem to be success as lawyer, doctor, physician, astronaunts, etc. To educate students toward to these area, probably will bring the country boost it self, and to the individual. however, there are many development that come from no where but to someone's institution, to educate people in those area above, it might undermine people's imagination, and only perform like a robot. And for the working space is also a problem, if the hospital was full of doctor, the numbers out of a supply, the salaries may go down, and the quality of the doctors may also need consideration.

For all reasons above, an education needs to do more than ever is to educate a child the basic skills for living, not to guide them to the field they seek to be. For every teachers, they can cause significant influence to students, thus, teach the students to follow their inner drive, to became a ''successful'' person in their mind, to balance the word with money, but to evaluate with its value.

To whom they want to suggest people to those field called success, i can not agree. To balance the child what he/she has will be the important thing than ever, and also can fullfill the areas we need in our future.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ose is to guide students in every field the attend to take part, not to all the way that s...
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Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
... part, not to all the way that succeed. while to become a successful person around th...
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Line 1, column 375, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ents to pursuing the unsuccessful area. For the very beginning, in every life, s...
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Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...ills from school, while before they can thinking thoroughly to decide who they want to b...
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Line 5, column 742, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Thus
... a famous painter that everybody knows. thus, to let the education decide which fiel...
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Suggestion: It
... someone with the natural skills. it could be nice at the first begining, th...
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Line 9, column 279, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'these areas'?
Suggestion: this area; these areas
...nts, etc. To educate students toward to these area, probably will bring the country boost ...
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Line 9, column 329, Rule ID: IT_SELF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'itself'?
Suggestion: itself
..., probably will bring the country boost it self, and to the individual. however, there ...
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Line 9, column 361, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: However
...y boost it self, and to the individual. however, there are many development that come f...
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Line 9, column 380, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun development seems to be countable; consider using: 'many developments'.
Suggestion: many developments
...d to the individual. however, there are many development that come from no where but to someones...
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Line 9, column 412, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ere are many development that come from no where but to someones institution, to e...
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Line 9, column 471, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'those areas'?
Suggestion: this area; those areas
...eones institution, to educate people in those area above, it might undermine peoples imagi...
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Line 9, column 756, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...he doctors may also need consideration. For all reasons above, an education need...
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Line 19, column 68, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...t people to those field called success, i can not agree. To balance the child wha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 478.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69874476987 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47058995164 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508368200837 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.9896195712 60.3974514979 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.733333333 118.986275619 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8666666667 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204343249116 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742572824043 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585777438313 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119212519026 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570887060599 0.0667264976115 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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