Throughout the world, education has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although many people believe that educational institutes play a vital role in students’ careers, the issue as to whether those institutes should intervene in students' future objectives or not remains controversial. To the best of my knowledge, I disagree with the opinion education institutions are responsible to impede students from following majors that they are not likely to be successful.
First, each student has different talents and potentials. Moreover, their traits are dynamic and could evolve while learning in schools, socializing or exploring the environment. For example, Steve Jobs, co-founder of Apple, was apparently indifferent to school for a long period until he met his fourth-grade teacher, Imogene Teddy Hill; she helped him develop focus towards learning by bribing him with candy and it did not take long for Jobs to get interested in learning after that; in the following years, Steve Jobs got increasingly curious about the world of electronics and from there started his journey building Apple. Therefore, educational institutions should embrace students instead of discouraging them.
Second, the definition of success is vague and not the same for every person. Many wish to become well-rounded individual but others might have disparate goals. To illustrate, President Abraham Lincoln wanted to eliminate slavery or Dr. Martin Luther King Jr. fought to abolish racial discrimination. For that reason, students walk different paths to their success and education institutions could not compel their subjective opinion on students. This might affect negatively their development process and prevent them to try something new.
Finally, it is important to recognise that schools are usually the places for teaching new knowledge. Many may argue that teachers should focus on playing instructor role. This argument could be true to some extent. However, they should take into account the fact that teachers also could be an inspirer. For instance, Oprah Winfrey was an ordinary girl in rural Mississippi, she could have been stuck there for the rest of her life if she did not meet Mrs. Duncan, her fourth-grade teacher; Mrs. Duncan saw potential in Oprah, encouraged her to read and gave her advice to choose books; eventually, Oprah Winfrey is now a successful talk show host. Therefore, educational institutions should be inspirational place to nurture students and help them reach their potentials.
In conclusion, it is true that educational institutions impact on students’ careers but taking all the above mentioned reasons, they should not interfere with students' future goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...le in students' careers, the issue as to whether those institutes should intervene in st...
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Line 5, column 79, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun wish seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many wishes'.
Suggestion: Many wishes
...ague and not the same for every person. Many wish to become well-rounded individual but o...
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Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: Much may; A good deal of may
... the places for teaching new knowledge. Many may argue that teachers should focus on pla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55635491607 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93420147036 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616306954436 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 85.5599669034 60.3974514979 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.333333333 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137282650919 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408370264659 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514693850412 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900239626021 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539598442036 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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