Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
The laws and tradition ethic rules set up in the societies are for the reasons. living as a part of the community, people need to follow rules that we can establish the safety environment for our generations. also, when children first explore the society, they should learn the rule from the society, as small as in family, as big as in school. To live in a healthy and safety life, even the rules are strict, there are good reasons to follow.
Nowadays, the society has lots of the problem about abuses, drugs, and gambling. those condition are common seen in teenagers. Without thoughtful consideration, young people needs the rule to follow then to learn how to interact with the world. For example, some people would take the ban of technology devices using at school would be too restrict for children. However, the occupation for young people is a student. The ban for children is for children not to distract from the class, and not to indulge in the world of games, also can improve the ability of self-control, and concentration on the course. Since the overusing of technologies in the society are a common disease, the ban could teach the students those abilities above.
Move on, taking another example of the laws of banning young people to get in a casino. it is quite restrict and are for the good reasons. As a teenage, due to the growing of the brain, the consequence of getting in a casino is unpredictable for young people to take. Thus, it may seem as a restrict law at first, but it also make a lecture of taking responsibility of themselves.
Finally, although there are many useless rules such as asking children to wear the same color of socks, and asking children to obey. HOwever,these may not be useful in the future, but the restriction are not too difficult to follow. In my opinion, as long as the restriction are benefit for the society as they grow, teenage has responsibility to follow.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, then, thus, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74183976261 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71837623163 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504451038576 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7982279242 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7777777778 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222768230919 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738363248488 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628182742641 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138318263893 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458010123386 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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