Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

family: Calibri;">family: "Lucida Grande";">In modern society, it is undeniable that parents have not enough time companying their children, parents spend their time doing schoolworks with their children becoming incresingly prevalence, cause they belived that time is only valuable in building a path of successful, such as finishing school courses. however, what comes to my mind is the lack of experience of life skills, as far as I'm concerned, while these all have benefits for children, I prefer that the best use of time is to play games and sports with children.

To begin with, schoolworks are definately important to children, they can learn and practice logic, math, language, such works could promote the development of brain. By doing schoolworks with parents, not only parents can keep up with what the progress is in the works, and also build up communication with child, through this, they can teaching them the importance of being resposibility to their life. Taking my experience as an example, while I'm at 6, there are drawing works for me as one of my summer works, I toss my drawing elsewhere that I can't even remember where it could be, my mother, who is the one that doing works with me, specifictly told me to stored it properly, found that I was not paying attention to her, giving me a lesson. From this lesson, I've learned that i should be responsible for my own stuff.

Admittedly, doing stuffs relate to schoolworks has some benefits, however, in my points of views, when it comes to time management, in the development of one's health, play games and sports are also crucial elements. Exploring the environment with family is the first contact to the world, it can develop children's concentration and the ability to obey the rules through board games. For examples, when playing the game of poker, child shold wait in line until his or her tern, through this experience, in the real society, if he or she want to buy a ticket in theater, children will understand the rule of wating. what is more, there are many benefits playing games with family, such as social roles, regulation of temper, intimate relationship with parents. In this case, due to the lack of time, while it is hard to balance, it is what children needed, the ability to play.

it is understandable that parents will like to keep up their time with schoolworks, however, the development of gross motor are as important as schoolworks, for example, playing soccer in a competitive way with parents can not be seen in school works, it can develop the ability to cooperate, and the understading of teamwork.

Based on the examples above, I could reasonably reaffirm that busy parents should spending their time play games and sports, in order to gain the ability of all fields.family: "Times New Roman";">

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, while, for example, such as, to begin with, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2389.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04008438819 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12059477822 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512658227848 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5975505681 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.769230769 100.406767564 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.4615384615 20.6045352989 177% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295125737242 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104634758075 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755780974706 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170643541824 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0913979787809 0.0645574589148 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 11.7677419355 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.247311828 205% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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