Tpo 44
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
there are many decisions and options to consider regarding our spend time choices. while some parents choose to spend time to have fun playing games or sports, others prefer to spend time to do things together about schoolwork. if I needed to choose, I would wholeheartedly opt for spending time while playing games or sports, as I believe the sincerity between parent and their children, making happy, would be better.
On the one hand, sincerity is in my opinion, maybe, one of the most important reasons for choosing to have fun. Sometimes it is a good choice making for parents if they want to spend a good time with their children. this choice creates a valuable relationship between them. Thanks to this option, one can feel free to be sincere to another. For example, while father and son are playing games, they can be more relaxed than normal. A child feels that his father is a good person because his father is playing games and stands near him as a friend. Moreover, with this sincerity, a child, has a problem with something about his school, can easily talk to his father without any fear. Consequently, using the time to play games rather than to do things about schoolwork is improves the relationship between parents and children.
In addition to sincerity, making happy is another noteworthy reason to choose a play game and sport. happiness is a feeling good for something. By happiness, one can improve his style of living and also increase family connections effectively. For instance, if parents spend time only on schoolwork, it creates pressure on children because there may be a lack of happiness in this process. children think that their parents are only helpful for homework, not having fun. it is widely known that children usually find happiness in playing games. this is another benefit to both sides.
In a nutshell, when all specific reasons and examples are carefully considered and evaluated, I have concluded that I prefer to use that time to have fun playing games and sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91545189504 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59768890713 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507288629738 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7791979942 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7368421053 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0526315789 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359222092047 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108266160609 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122011732096 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257419213752 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107545691057 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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